September 16th, 2009
|10:52 am - Stories I never wrote meme|
Give me the title of a story I’ve never written, and feedback telling me what you liked best about it, and I will tell you some or all of: the first sentence, the last sentence, the thing that made me want to write it, the biggest problem I had while writing it, why it almost never got submitted to magazines, the scene that hit the cutting room floor but that I wish I’d been able to salvage, or something else that I want readers to know.
This could be fun.
Current Mood: busy
She moved with an elegant grace that told me she was completely unaware of the myriads of beings following her every move with their eyes.
As we gazed in five suns setting over the horizon, I removed my helmet and realized I was happy on Quaxran for the first time and finally ready to set aside the wandering life of a space pirate.
Why this fiction:
That kinda writes itself doesn't it? Viking Space Pirates find romance on the hottest planet in the galaxy. Who wouldn't want to write that story. The last time I visited Quaxaran, I took a trip to Kyatza and climbed to the top of Bronson Hill to watch the sun set and it was so magical, the kind of place, the kind of moment, that really does change your perspective on everything. I wanted to capture that moment of complete and utter peace; like it's all falling perfectly into place, like the first part of your life was just a vehicle to get you to this place, this moment. I was glad I was able to incorporate that image into this deeply romantic love story.
The biggest problem:
Working with such a willful heroine presented more challenges than a demure one, but a demure one would have been a bad match for the hero and very out of context. Some of the scenes had to be rewritten several times to get the right combination of strength, power, and snark.
Why it almost never got submitted:
Well, it was too long, for one thing. And I thought people would think it was silly, but sometimes you just got to go for it!
Hardest cut scene:
There was a beautiful scene after the kidnapping where the heroine nearly drowns in the bar vat of simple syrup. She's escaping and ends up in the bar, which is structured like a typical space bar. Meanwhile the pirates are under attack by the Telasians and the ship is taking some hard knocks. And she ends up in the vat. She's saved by quick thinking and Andre the Servobot and she and Andre have this really sweet conversation about the hero's past and why our heroine has such trouble believing in him, and I really loved it, but then, you know that information ultimately had to come from him in order to show his progression, so off went the scene.
Things you should know:
It's probably obvious that I took a few liberties with time and space. Obviously Gracnok is more than two days from Telasia, even at the best speeds currently possible, you couldn't get there in under a week and certainly not with the kind of damage they were flying with.
And it's unreasonable to believe that Empress Clyondia would have ever been involved directly in the trial. At best she would have assigned her son, Edgerael to handle it. Also history shows that Clyondia was never on Quaxaran in her youth. She was there shortly after her coronation and she did make those comments, I just moved them to a different period in her life.